Resume help

snakeblitz33

snakeblitz33

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As I hope you know by now, I will be out of work at the end of June. So, I need some help with my resume. I am applying at all of the plumbing shops in my local area, so my resume is taylored towards getting a job at one of them. Please comment on it and critique it as you see fit. There are a few things that I can not get the words right... and I might need to improve. Some things have been edited out for obvious reasons.
My next post will be my resume, followed by my cover letter. Please go lightly on me. If you have any questions to get my mind jogging, please ask!
 
snakeblitz33

snakeblitz33

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Seth -------
Address
Phone
Email
OBJECTIVE
To secure a position as an entry level plumbing apprentice.
EDUCATION
college August 2006-Spring 2010
Business Administration Degree on hold
High School Graduated May 2---
Member of the National Honor Society
RELATED WORK EXPERIENCE
Owner, (business name), location, dates
Designed and developed aquarium plumbing and filtration systems for home and commercial use, built and maintained reverse osmosis and de-ionized water filtration systems, maintained 6 sump systems on 100 aquariums totaling 4,000 gallons. Installed plumbing systems and managed filtration systems for many clients.
WORK EXPERIENCE
Taxidermist, company name, location, LA, October 2004-present
Open and close the store on time, responsible for managing large amounts of money, experience in working with state and federal wildlife and fisheries agents for the collection of poached animals, customer service, and general operation of the taxidermy shop.
OTHER EXPERIENCE
Experience with PVC, Quest, PEX style plumbing. Installed water pumps, sump pumps, pressurized systems and drain lines. Installed and repaired swimming pool filtration systems, pumps, and plumbing. Repaired and replaced toilets, sinks, and general house hold improvements. Skilled with carpentry and finish work.
 
snakeblitz33

snakeblitz33

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(My address)
(date)
(Insert Address)
Dear Sirs,
Enclosed in this envelope is my resume to apply for a plumbing apprenticeship at your company.
I believe I have much to offer for your company and will prove to be a long term asset. I am a dedicated and honest employee who will strive for excellence and will do what it takes to convince you to invest in my future.
I have always found plumbing to be a fascinating and very rewarding career for which my dedication and personality can embrace. I would be happy to meet with you to discuss my qualifications in greater detail.
Sincerely,
Seth -------
 
rickross23

rickross23

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I would hire ya! Good luck buddy! Do you have an interview? If so, be yourself. Good luck and I know you will get over this speed bump in life.
 
reefraff

reefraff

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Move your description of your plumbing skills (PVC, Pex etc) to the first paragraph. Unless your potential employer is a reefer he will have no idea what goes into it. You want to get their attention as early as possible.
"Designed and built custom aquarium sump and filtration systems utilizing PVC, PEX and Quest plumbing components that included drain lines, pressurized feed lines, water transfer systems, reverse osmosis water feed systems as well as several types of monitoring and automated control components"
Or something like that LOL!.. If you ever hooked up an ATO that's your automated control system so it aint total BS :)
 
sweat90lx

sweat90lx

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I would move work experience and other experience 1st and 2nd. Then work experience last.
Graduated High School May 2---, you youngin. LOL
Not sure where you live, but railroads are hiring these days. Kansas City Southern is the one in your area, check their website.
 
fishmaster78

fishmaster78

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TYSON
13 arissa Dr
Ventura, CA 93007
951-500-1589
metailm@live.com
OBJECTIVE: To exceed all expectations within the company by accomplishing all goals set-forth pertaining to guest service, company policies, departmental procedures, financial gains and uphold the 5-Star/5-Diamond quality of excellence.
EXPERIENCE:
10/2011-Present Bacara Resort & Spa Santa Barbara, CA
Food & Beverage Assistant Manager
§ Property Micros expert
§ Order processing through Eatec and Labor management through Timesaver ADP
§ Create daily training techniques to ensure guest service standards are upheld
7/2010-8/2011 Pala Casino Resort & Spa Pala, CA

In Room Dining Manager
§ Areas of responsibility include In Room Dining, High Limit Lounge, Poolside Café, Elite Check-In, Poker Room Food Distribution
§ Process orders through MMS, and manage labor with Kronos software. Fully functional with Micros POS units.
§ Implemented a new High Limit buffet level of service. Club style serving within the High Limit Lounge. Developing training manual for this new outlet.
§ Certified in Serve Safe and LEAD
§ Created new menu for Poolside Café and Bar/ Infinity Nightclub/ Poker Room/Guest Amenity Book
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6/2008-7/2010 Pala Casino Resort & Spa Pala, CA

Mama’s Cucina Italian/ The Oak Room Assistant Manager
§ Responsible for both fine dining restaurants on property.
§ Assisted in the selection and implementation of new wine lists in both outlets.
§ Upheld service staff to 4 diamond level of service throughout all shifts.
6/2006-6/2008 Pala Casino Resort & Spa Pala, CA
In Room Dining Assistant Manager
§ Interim Manager for 7 months
§ Developed Room Service Wine & Liquor Knowledge exam to help team members effectively up serve and group wine/liquor with food items.
EDUCATION:
2010-2011 Mt. San Jacinto College Menifee, CA
General Education Courses
REFERENCES:
Available upon request.
 
snakeblitz33

snakeblitz33

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Move your description of your plumbing skills (PVC, Pex etc) to the first paragraph. Unless your potential employer is a reefer he will have no idea what goes into it. You want to get their attention as early as possible.
"Designed and built custom aquarium sump and filtration systems utilizing PVC, PEX and Quest plumbing components that included drain lines, pressurized feed lines, water transfer systems, reverse osmosis water feed systems as well as several types of monitoring and automated control components"
Or something like that LOL!.. If you ever hooked up an ATO that's your automated control system so it aint total BS :)
That is a great idea. Thanks.
Any suggestions for the cover letter dialogue?
 
geridoc

geridoc

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I think your cover letter needs to be stronger. As it stand nw it is a waste of paper-i doesn't say anything specific about you other than you are lookinfor a job and you think you would be a good employee. The resume is where you put the facts, but the cover as letter is where you make your pitch. Give them your claim for your value, and try to be employer specific, if you can. We recently hired a new faculty member who had found out about a new grant we recently got and showed us in his cover letter how well he would fit into that project. If a company specializes in some type of plumbing, state how your skills would compliment that specialty. Use the same facts each time, but vary the emphasis.
Good luck!
 
snakeblitz33

snakeblitz33

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Thanks GeriDoc. I'll try to incorporate that into my cover letter. You are correct - all it does say is that I want a job. LOL
 
snakeblitz33

snakeblitz33

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Nope. But my wife got a job.
All the plumbing stores said they hire mostly in spring. I was just a little too late.
 
bender77

bender77

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Quote:
Originally Posted by GeriDoc http:///t/391820/resume-help#post_3476705
I think your cover letter needs to be stronger. As it stand nw it is a waste of paper-i doesn't say anything specific about you other than you are lookinfor a job and you think you would be a good employee. The resume is where you put the facts, but the cover as letter is where you make your pitch. Give them your claim for your value, and try to be employer specific, if you can. We recently hired a new faculty member who had found out about a new grant we recently got and showed us in his cover letter how well he would fit into that project. If a company specializes in some type of plumbing, state how your skills would compliment that specialty. Use the same facts each time, but vary the emphasis.
Good luck!
I agree. The cover letter is to tell them how wonderful and qualified you are. Good luck.
 
2quills

2quills

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Are you looking to get in working with a supplyer or an actual plumber? Either way, unless you know people in the industry you're best bet is to go to trade school. I'd start there before anywhere else. Chances are you would qualify for some low income grants. Most plumbers I know could really care diddly squat about your hobby experience or cover letter, not to be mean, just sayin. As an apprentice you wouldn't be doing any of that anyway. You'd be digging ditches, cutting pipe...basically being a goffer for your first couple of years.
 
snakeblitz33

snakeblitz33

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I realize that.
I think i finally decided to just become a taxidermist full time. My dad said he has a five year plan to retire and let me take over the shop. So i guess i will stick it out five more years, now that my wife got a good job. And plans on switching to public school asap when there is a position available.
 
bender77

bender77

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Quote:
Originally Posted by SnakeBlitz33 http:///t/391820/resume-help#post_3481126
I realize that.
I think i finally decided to just become a taxidermist full time. My dad said he has a five year plan to retire and let me take over the shop. So i guess i will stick it out five more years, now that my wife got a good job. And plans on switching to public school asap when there is a position available.
Hey, there is good money in taxidermy if you are good at it. If you like doing it, then I agree. Stick with it and take over the shop. It takes a huge weight off to have a plan :)
 
jaodissa

jaodissa

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Good luck with the job hunt! I haven't worked in 6 years so I am no help about the resume, but Im crossing my fingers for ya!!
 
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